R. J. Hoffman

Amazing, reminds me of my first hunt. i love the way the mist is rising up in the back ground.

close ups were good, but top pic., hill, and one of model car are hard to see.

i like the wing structure, but i think you could depict the mussles around the wings a bit better.

i like Bunnie #1 because he looks like my rabit when she was sleeping

I am had the exact same problem. its like a build up of creative juices and the damn wants to break. One pathway is to join a role playing site. ...

thank you meep

usually fantasy but ill try almost anything

this needs some added work. it is to short, and i cannot make a real review because of it

Hey im looking for some one to write a story with. we can discuss what type of story it is after you PM me if you have interest.

Yes it is better. PM me when you get chapter 3 submited. I look forward to seeing what is next.

you said this was a fan fic. please move to fan fic. I will review when it is moved. PM me.

i stated i had only critiqued the first post. What i meant by the science fiction section, is the whole hightech voice activated tech. and stuff, but thats just my ...

for part one, your line "he always found the thought of it sickened him. He walked away with a sick feeling at the bottom of his stomach." this part is ...

good point tree. maybe she could be fading in and out of consiencioucness (spelled wrong srry) and maybe even have some hint as to why earthlings are being sciences guinie ...

pretty good. still... more description is needed. are the bars metal? or are they high strength composit plastic? what do some of the mutated humans look like? do they have ...